Arvostele runo!
The Mother
“When your mother has grown older,
When her dear, faithful eyes
no longer see life as they once did,
When her feet, grown tired,
No longer want to carry her as she walks -
Then lend her your arm in support,
Escort her with happy pleasure.
The hour will come when, weeping, you
Must accompany her on her final walk.
And if she asks you something,
Then give her an answer.
And if she asks again, then speak!
And if she asks yet again, respond to her,
Not impatiently, but with gentle calm.
And if she cannot understand you properly
Explain all to her happily.
The hour will come, the bitter hour,
When her mouth asks for nothing more.”
Kommentit (17)
Tylsä jollotus, jonka idea tuli selväksi jo alussa ja loppu oli toistoa.
Ihan ok, kiva. Surullinen on mutta se oli varmasti tarkoitus.
Kirjoita suomeksi saattaa olla edes siedettävä.
Tulee mieleen ne Facebookissa kiertelevät mietelause/elämänviisaus-kuvat. Kova on yritys, mutta herkkyys ja koskettaminen kaukana.
Synkkä. Lopun alkua. Positiivisuuden pilkahdus. Toimivuus ois ollu ehkä parempi suomen kielellä, en mä tiedä.
Käy heittämässä rakkausrunot.fi sivulle, siellä mäkin oon pyöriny koko illan "arvostelemassa".
Are they not supposed to rhyme?
I absolutely cannot be bothered;
Writing poems is hardly worth our time.
Why, look upon the abomination you've fathered!
Against humanity, this truly is a crime.
In this thread full of misery and shit,
There is infinite dread without any sort of wit.
[quote author="Vierailija" time="19.10.2014 klo 01:03"]
Are they not supposed to rhyme?
I absolutely cannot be bothered;
Writing poems is hardly worth our time.
Why, look upon the abomination you've fathered!
Against humanity, this truly is a crime.
In this thread full of misery and shit,
There is infinite dread without any sort of wit.
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Oh how witty you are!
You deserve a golden star.
But perhaps you are too fast
your judgement to cast?
Lisää arvosteluja! Sanokaa ihan rehellisesti mitä mieleenne tulee.